User blog comment:StarlightAT/HELLO/@comment-35541130-20140326042800

Man this was awesome, I never even thought about reading the fanfiction for the series but now i'll be sure to check it all out!

Granting of thoughts is a go.

"In truth she was typical for this kind of school, typical black hair, typical school uniform, typical sardonic smile, typical person with an annoying personality that was set to be the perfect student." I don't know if it's just me but I find typical could have been replaced with some synonyms like standard, common, regular, I don't know I'm by no means a writer :P other thand that though I didn't notice much (might have been too into the story!).

Makie was also well done and I really like her ability. I feel like she could have been a great addition to the group of problem children(le cries)! I noticed though (and I could be very wrong) but times was a little messed up when she was in the hospital 2 weeks after he learned the deadline was 2 months and she was bald. Then she had her hair back at the end? Nit picking here sorry lol but I was just giving some little feed back since there wasn't much wrong with it!

All said and done it was great and the start of me reading all dis fan fic, I plan on reading your other ones next! :)